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The Dream That Could Not Be

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It was a dream that I dreamed.
It was a dream, that I knew.
It was something about this dream, that
Could not come true.

It was something I said.
It was something I did.
It was something I wish I said, but
Never said at all.

It was this time I remember...
It was this time I was confused.
It was, you see, the dream I dreamed that
Really came true.

It was one thing I said...
It was one thing I did...
It was one thing I thought about saying, and
Now I wish I did.

It was a time, I'll remember.
It was a dream, that could not come true.
It was a dream that could be avoided... but
Instead I hurt you.

So there's something I said.
And there's something I did.
It was something I didn't want to say, but
That's what I had to do.

You're still very close.
Yet still so very far.
There is something I wish I could say now, but
That's what I cannot do...

I love you.
This is just something that randomly popped into my head tonight as I was writing in my journal (my actual journal... kinda a new thing for me :p ). Anyway, I'd like to know what you guys think. Any thoughts, recommendations, or just comments in general would be appreciated. I'm a bit new to poetry (as you could probably tell) and I have much to learn yet. Thanks guys.
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Chezzy-Am's avatar

A shame that inbred genetically defective hillbilly gold-digging cunts who run this website tend to force someone into actually digging through the crap, in order to find such works.


I'll keep it brief, I like it. I actually like how you used a dream to describe how you felt. And that the feelings that you are presenting here, are much more than just a regular run of the mill love poem... there is genuine, even palatable affection and digressions of... loss, perhaps. Yeah, loss, because you meant to say those words, but it felt as if you were holding yourself back, for naught. It definitely feels that way here for sure.


Overall, I think it is a good work overall. I approve.